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How Would You Write This?

Not to make light of the situation But I couldn't help but wonder what the person who wrote the except was thinking. "He is dead" isn't exactly wrong but wouldn't it have sounded better to write "A pedestrian in Queens was killed after being struck by an S.U.V. and dragged by a van. "

I don't know why this bothered me, I may even be wrong and the excerpt was written correctly. How would you have written the excerpt?